AL-BISHAK'S REVIEW OF A POEM BY HANEEFAH ABDULRAHMAN

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POEM: Leave your foot prints
             Not only
             At the shore of
             Our forbidden departure

             Also
             Leave tattoos of
             Your footprints in me
             
          © HANEEFAH ABDULRAHMAN

REVIEW: THEME: Unforgettable signpost.

SETTING: Human relationship.

SYNOPSIS: The PERSONA is being departed by a relation. So urges the person to register a permanent impression for everlasting remembrance at the departure point and in the mind. The departure is not a pleasant one hence "forbidden".

THE MORAL: Sometimes we come in contact with somebody that is very special to us. Just when such person is leaving our company,  it becomes painful, hence the justification for a landmark for constant remembrance as much as we hold such person dear to our hearts being human libraries.

STYLE: This is a *free verse* in two

STANZAS: comprising a *quatrain* in the first stanza and three lines in the second stanza.

FIGURATIVE DEVICES: *epithet*: "forbidden departure"; *extended metaphor*:  the poetess uses the *imagery* of a riverside as the landscape of her relationship. Just as the relation painfully departs, she wants the person to leave footmarks on not only the sands but also in her heart. "Footprints" are used as a *metaphor* and *repetition* for effect. Something to cherish permanently is what is being compared to "footprints". "Tattoos of/ Your footprints" is, to me, a double or powerful *metaphor*.  This is because both the tattoos and footprints emblemize and reinforce the unforgettable memory spot or watermark. This may be a love poem irrespective of the subject - romantic, filial or parental. It can *symbolize* anything so cherished that its absence is painfully felt, and desires everlasting memory.
Good luck.

REVIEWER: AL-BISHAK

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